WALT: Use adjectives (describing words) to make our writing interesting to the reader.
We pretended we were a soldier in the war, using our senses to describe what it was like.
I saw...ginormous tanks blowing by rocket launchers and bombs
I heard...people dying by a blast from soldiers firing bullets
I felt...blood dripping down on my back sliding down on the stony dirt ground
I wondered...if I could survive living in the war
To Liam,
ReplyDeleteYour felt sentence has lots of description with it sliding from your back down onto not just the ground but the stony dirt ground. Great to see you adding detail to your writing making it more interesting for me as the reader. I am a little bit confused by your saw sentence. Can you re-read it, how could you reword that sentence to paint a clearer picture in my mind as the reader so that your picture as a writer and mine as a reader are the same?
From Mrs Head